Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
I enjoyed Scenery quite a bit. Rather captivating and innocent, with a good sense of humor about it. Well written to boot.
Untitled lacked a strong sense of power, but I liked the meaning and word choice.
I wanted Very much to like Dysphoria, and I'm sure I would have loved it if Talore had given it one extra read through. A lot of it was really beautiful, but only after I changed the arrangement ever so slightly (typically the changes were no more significant than fixing phrases that got a little muddled).
Bound to a house
manufactured cotton jail cell
my hunter's muscles ache from disuse; hawkeye vision separating
the totemic from the academic
it was black magic
the cool aura of a wet spring evening
is the scientific method of a pagan reality
glass windows let light in - but I can't see
an interpretation of the green other side
though it calls to me
leave your house
and go home
I felt like the emphasis was missing a little, and some of the lines could have been broken differently. It was sort of excellent poem someone who's ESL would write (I've had similar thoughts on some of Guilan's work, though his english is usually very good).
Bound to a house
manufactured cotton jail cell
my hunter's muscles ache from disuse; hawkeye vision separating
the totemic from the academic
it was black magic
the cool aura of a wet spring evening
is the scientific method of a pagan reality
glass windows let light in - but I can't see
an interpretation of the green other side
though it calls to me
leave your house
and go home
I felt like the emphasis was missing a little, and some of the lines could have been broken differently. It was sort of excellent poem someone who's ESL would write (I've had similar thoughts on some of Guilan's work, though his english is usually very good).
Damn keyboards
'hawk's eye' was intentionally constructed that way to echo 'hunter's muscles' and to better suggest that they are hawk eyes, not just the vision attributed to hawk eye vision.
I am a native English speaker and I am/was an English major at university, so I'd hope that the similarity to ESL writing is purely coincidental...
Perhaps use hawk-eye, to distinguish from the turn of phrase "Hawkeye," and to keep it from forming the awkward looking "Eye vision."
I like the concept and imagery, I just don't think the poem has been refined to the best it can be, in terms of execution. I'm gradually learning the importance of revising poetry (I don't think I post anything until about a month after I write it, and not until after I revise at least twice).
For example: I didn't get the point of saying hawk-eye vision until after you pointed out that it's supposed to say you're character has the physical characteristics of a hawk, a metaphorical bird attempting to fly away from the prison of his reality. (or is that metaphor just me being pretentious?)
Haha, it was there primarily to reinforce the idea of totemism in the next line, as well as the tie-in to nature as a whole, that the speaker is a natural being in an artificial environment. The connection between the hawk and freedom definitely helps, though.
I almost never revise my poetry unless I have to publish it or something. It personally feels more honest, like what the Romantic poets exemplified (I am aware that they didn't manage to hold themselves to that paradigm often, alas~)
Here are the Poetry submissions for this week:
Scenery by Guilan
Untitled by LogicX
Unhelp Yourself by Zelderex
Recycle by SkyHeartChaos
Dysophoria by Talore
Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
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I enjoyed Scenery quite a bit. Rather captivating and innocent, with a good sense of humor about it. Well written to boot.
Untitled lacked a strong sense of power, but I liked the meaning and word choice.
I wanted Very much to like Dysphoria, and I'm sure I would have loved it if Talore had given it one extra read through. A lot of it was really beautiful, but only after I changed the arrangement ever so slightly (typically the changes were no more significant than fixing phrases that got a little muddled).
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Bound to a house
manufactured cotton jail cell
my hunter's muscles ache from disuse;
hawkeye vision separating
the totemic from the academic
it was black magic
the cool aura of a wet spring evening
is the scientific method of a pagan reality
glass windows let light in - but I can't see
an interpretation of the green other side
though it calls to me
leave your house
and go home
I felt like the emphasis was missing a little, and some of the lines could have been broken differently. It was sort of excellent poem someone who's ESL would write (I've had similar thoughts on some of Guilan's work, though his english is usually very good).
Join the Poetry Running Contest!
Damn keyboards
'hawk's eye' was intentionally constructed that way to echo 'hunter's muscles' and to better suggest that they are hawk eyes, not just the vision attributed to hawk eye vision.
I am a native English speaker and I am/was an English major at university, so I'd hope that the similarity to ESL writing is purely coincidental...
I like the concept and imagery, I just don't think the poem has been refined to the best it can be, in terms of execution. I'm gradually learning the importance of revising poetry (I don't think I post anything until about a month after I write it, and not until after I revise at least twice).
For example: I didn't get the point of saying hawk-eye vision until after you pointed out that it's supposed to say you're character has the physical characteristics of a hawk, a metaphorical bird attempting to fly away from the prison of his reality. (or is that metaphor just me being pretentious?)
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I almost never revise my poetry unless I have to publish it or something. It personally feels more honest, like what the Romantic poets exemplified (I am aware that they didn't manage to hold themselves to that paradigm often, alas~)
Join the Poetry Running Contest!