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He speaks in words peppered with puns and with
words opening and flowing like the air from his lungs
that inflate the pastel spheres and tubes that expand in his hands and magically-
Insidiously-
turn into the whole zoo with a flip of his hand and a twist and a pop or two.
really creative
Guilan- I thought the strophes lacked a sense of unity. It had a simple concept. I thought it could have been much more developed though.
flare was:
I play repentant
Dried alike
Crossed the paths
That aligns the stars
Ignite the fires of demise
Sam111111-
You painted a vivid scene and ended it with a thought-provoking message. I was hoping for more. Your sweet flare was:
Have you ever felt like you just wanted to run away from something, run away as far as possible, but as far as you run you can't get away, it's like glued on, its stuck,
trying to explain
and the scary thing is that eventually once you stop running and try to remove it realize that something is you, and when you take it and look at the distasteful thing and cut it out,
you leave your heart behind
Niv-
Hmm...plain and simple but this is a competition; I wanted to grasp something from it but couldn't
Vocare-
Hmm.. I like the rhythm, the sonnet structure, and the unity of the piece. It's not easy writing a sonnet no doubt, and I give you props for writing it in that form. Meaning is well-compressed. It gave me that dreamy atmosphere in my mind. I enjoyed the poem
your flare was...
But still I press and still I hope that soon
As stars above and stars below do shine
Your grace, my lord, bestowed and fears are strewn
Upon the earth while eager dreams align
Fallen Ibis-
Imaginative concept. However, I thought some descriptions were a bit wordy. There were some adjectives that weren't really necessary to some of the scenes. I felt the energy though.
flare was...
Funny that I find comfort
In a touch that stains the soul
Like the blackest ink stains paper
But this stain is like a mask
That I have worn a thousand times
Interesting match, you guys. I really enjoyed reading your pieces so (applause) to you all. I was having a hard time deciding who to vote: Boros, Sam111111, or Niv. Since I can only vote 2... my votes go to...
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Here are this round's entries:
- At my perch at the top of the stairs by Boros
- TIME IS OVER (the game is also) by Guilan
- Premonition by Sam111111
- To the Highest Bidder by Niv
- Vocare by Norm D. Plumb
- Dark Emotion Guide by Fallen Iblis
Everyone's welcome to enter for the next round. Good votingthe flare of your piece was....
words opening and flowing like the air from his lungs
that inflate the pastel spheres and tubes that expand in his hands and magically-
Insidiously-
turn into the whole zoo with a flip of his hand and a twist and a pop or two.
really creative
Guilan- I thought the strophes lacked a sense of unity. It had a simple concept. I thought it could have been much more developed though.
flare was:
Dried alike
Crossed the paths
That aligns the stars
Ignite the fires of demise
Sam111111-
You painted a vivid scene and ended it with a thought-provoking message. I was hoping for more. Your sweet flare was:
trying to explain
and the scary thing is that eventually once you stop running and try to remove it realize that something is you, and when you take it and look at the distasteful thing and cut it out,
you leave your heart behind
Niv-
Hmm...plain and simple but this is a competition; I wanted to grasp something from it but couldn't
Vocare-
Hmm.. I like the rhythm, the sonnet structure, and the unity of the piece. It's not easy writing a sonnet no doubt, and I give you props for writing it in that form. Meaning is well-compressed. It gave me that dreamy atmosphere in my mind. I enjoyed the poem
your flare was...
As stars above and stars below do shine
Your grace, my lord, bestowed and fears are strewn
Upon the earth while eager dreams align
Fallen Ibis-
Imaginative concept. However, I thought some descriptions were a bit wordy. There were some adjectives that weren't really necessary to some of the scenes. I felt the energy though.
flare was...
In a touch that stains the soul
Like the blackest ink stains paper
But this stain is like a mask
That I have worn a thousand times
Interesting match, you guys. I really enjoyed reading your pieces so (applause) to you all. I was having a hard time deciding who to vote: Boros, Sam111111, or Niv. Since I can only vote 2... my votes go to...
Gui
special thanks to sentimentgx4 for the sig
Pourquoi?