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I liked PSS on first read, and knew it was gonna get at least one of my votes; it made me chortle aloud... startling the dog.
Zel's retrofit stutters in, hits a hard rhythm, and screeches to a halt.
Tickled Pink weirded me out for some reason... I reread it a few times, and I think it's because Pink white paisley yellow follow each other so closely and form a subconcious image, and that color combination sounds weird. Dunno... that's what I got out of it.
Lol... weirded you out? The rhythm is tight, and the sounds are jarring. Maybe it appeals to the day trippers among us more.
I can explain it, though! It's about finding joy melt into you, realizing the institutions of control and exploitation are false prophets and wolf-like shepherds who never claim responsibility for what they put their lessors through. It's about travelling beyond your confines in a journey purely of the mind. It's also about an acid trip, where colors run into thoughts and feelings.
It could be broken down further: white rabbits is a carrol allusion, and to follow them is to follow them out of the realm of the real, but that's probably obvious. Paisley Partitions are the spiral pattern you see on halucinogenic drugs, sectioned off from normal vision, into otherworldly areas of your surroundings. Yellow messiahs are the cowardly preachers who never dare to venture past the realm of reality. Looking glass missions are holy realms uncharted by normal eyes; they're, "through the looking glass," another carrol allusion. Fenetics are the muddy places you sometimes get stuck, which usually vibrate, change, and meld into a, shall we say, psychotic mood. Collapse of the mind is loss of ego, something necessary for the spiritual development of man as synecdoche for society. A quantum correction represents an incredibly miniscule change in thinking. Society, an extension of man, thinks itself a God on the backs of the powerful, and tries to break a few eggs in creating utopia-- but never remembers how many wrongs it has committed. Then's the part about the lack of a frontier to hedge, and how the holy place of seclusion has become profaned, but that we can choose instead to explore elsewhere with the tools of antiquity, compass being a metaphor for the tools of the shaman, or what we know today was more of a psychonaut than a sage. Finally, it ends with bringing the extra-mental exploration to the now corrupt underlings of society, who may not be ready for the change in perception, but choose to forge ahead anyway.
I really liked yours; can relate. Just be careful, I hear harper's a real nazi.
Blippy's poem was an interesting read. Clever wordplay, and intriguing imagery are, as always, the strongest points. Also, AABB rhyme scheme used to perfection.
The others all felt...off. Maybe I was unsettled by the lack of Yanni, Madding, or Kpaca
Blippy's poem was an interesting read. Clever wordplay, and intriguing imagery are, as always, the strongest points. Also, AABB rhyme scheme used to perfection.
The others all felt...off. Maybe I was unsettled by the lack of Yanni, Madding, or Kpaca
I didn't feel it last week. I'll probably enter something this week.
I voted for Blippy and Zelderex as they stuck out to me the most... and not because Blippy was threatening to slap my nuts this time.
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Here are the submissions we have for you this week:
Looney Sonnet by BlippyTheSlug
Awestruck by Guilan
Trickled Pink by DarkwaterElemental
What happens when I Think by Zelderex
Political Short Poem by Hallucination
Vote for the poem you feel is the best. Contestants, remember, you are required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)! This policy is to help keep the PRC active.
Good luck!
Lol... weirded you out? The rhythm is tight, and the sounds are jarring. Maybe it appeals to the day trippers among us more.
I can explain it, though! It's about finding joy melt into you, realizing the institutions of control and exploitation are false prophets and wolf-like shepherds who never claim responsibility for what they put their lessors through. It's about travelling beyond your confines in a journey purely of the mind. It's also about an acid trip, where colors run into thoughts and feelings.
It could be broken down further: white rabbits is a carrol allusion, and to follow them is to follow them out of the realm of the real, but that's probably obvious. Paisley Partitions are the spiral pattern you see on halucinogenic drugs, sectioned off from normal vision, into otherworldly areas of your surroundings. Yellow messiahs are the cowardly preachers who never dare to venture past the realm of reality. Looking glass missions are holy realms uncharted by normal eyes; they're, "through the looking glass," another carrol allusion. Fenetics are the muddy places you sometimes get stuck, which usually vibrate, change, and meld into a, shall we say, psychotic mood. Collapse of the mind is loss of ego, something necessary for the spiritual development of man as synecdoche for society. A quantum correction represents an incredibly miniscule change in thinking. Society, an extension of man, thinks itself a God on the backs of the powerful, and tries to break a few eggs in creating utopia-- but never remembers how many wrongs it has committed. Then's the part about the lack of a frontier to hedge, and how the holy place of seclusion has become profaned, but that we can choose instead to explore elsewhere with the tools of antiquity, compass being a metaphor for the tools of the shaman, or what we know today was more of a psychonaut than a sage. Finally, it ends with bringing the extra-mental exploration to the now corrupt underlings of society, who may not be ready for the change in perception, but choose to forge ahead anyway.
I really liked yours; can relate. Just be careful, I hear harper's a real nazi.
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The others all felt...off. Maybe I was unsettled by the lack of Yanni, Madding, or Kpaca
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I didn't feel it last week. I'll probably enter something this week.
I voted for Blippy and Zelderex as they stuck out to me the most... and not because Blippy was threatening to slap my nuts this time.
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Guilan failed to vote.