Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
Been out of the loop for a while, but this seemed like a solid week. Complimentary notes from a stranger, don't take me too seriously:
Griselbrand is Coming: I lol'd.
Cold Insights: Stream of consciousness not my favorite, and seemed a little contrived. I like a very tight poem, where every word matters, and this seemed to have a little too much fluff for my liking.
Rainstorm: Poem about the rain, been done, but the repetition was very nice, and I liked the somewhat prosaic language and structure.
Sleep: I really liked it until you hit "down the rabbit hole", then it seemed like a string of cliched sentences and phrases strung together.
The Governor's Warfield Parkway: Very innocent language. The specificity of place gave a real individuality to the piece and the little clumps of imagery were quite pretty.
Mane: I liked the ending, the irony of being consumed by a goal and winning but actually losing. I also liked some of the individual lines, but the metaphor of the lion and the gazelle did not really excite me. I wrote a poem in high school about a forest fire, and it was really really awful, so now reading anything about forest fires makes me cringe lol.
Been out of the loop for a while, but this seemed like a solid week. Complimentary notes from a stranger, don't take me too seriously:
Griselbrand is Coming: I lol'd.
Cold Insights: Stream of consciousness not my favorite, and seemed a little contrived. I like a very tight poem, where every word matters, and this seemed to have a little too much fluff for my liking.
Rainstorm: Poem about the rain, been done, but the repetition was very nice, and I liked the somewhat prosaic language and structure.
Sleep: I really liked it until you hit "down the rabbit hole", then it seemed like a string of cliched sentences and phrases strung together.
The Governor's Warfield Parkway: Very innocent language. The specificity of place gave a real individuality to the piece and the little clumps of imagery were quite pretty.
Mane: I liked the ending, the irony of being consumed by a goal and winning but actually losing. I also liked some of the individual lines, but the metaphor of the lion and the gazelle did not really excite me. I wrote a poem in high school about a forest fire, and it was really really awful, so now reading anything about forest fires makes me cringe lol.
Good to have you back with the PRC! Same goes to Ivaldi. We had a good week, so I figured I'd to a full Critique.
Griselbrand is Coming: ...oh...kay?
Cold Insights: I liked it less and less the longer it went. It lacked focus.
Rainstorm: Thoroughly enjoyed it. Excellently written, loved the deep analysis of the tiniest little things, and the sidelong social commentary.
Sleep: Just didn't find much to like in here. I was all about it during the first two stanzas, assuming it'd be about sloth and lost potential and all those good things, then it just sorta didn't find a subject matter and lost focus.
The Governor's Warfield Parkway: Well ****. I know a winning Poem when I see one.
Soft Map: Just generally unexciting. It's the Off-White Paint of poems: good, nothing wrong with it, just not special.
As for my piece, feel like I'm in a rut as far as my writing goes- it doesn't help that I rotate between lousy, and win/near-win. I need to work on refining my writing, putting more focus on what works in the poem and removing what doesn't work.
Soft Map: Just generally unexciting. It's the Off-White Paint of poems: good, nothing wrong with it, just not special.
As for my piece, feel like I'm in a rut as far as my writing goes- it doesn't help that I rotate between lousy, and win/near-win. I need to work on refining my writing, putting more focus on what works in the poem and removing what doesn't work.
Hey, if I can write a poem thats not crap, that's okay with me. I've never been very good at it lol... I'll have a weekend where I write a couple things, but mostly I work on short stories I'm trying to get published...
Posting writing and creating a steady stream (which you seem to have been doing) is really great, but you don't get that kind of in depth analysis and criticism here that you really need to redraft and really workshop a piece of writing. Hopefully you have someone you could workshop with in the real world?
As for stagnancy, I find that what I'm reading really changes what and how I'm writing. What/Who have you been reading? What/Who do you really enjoy reading? Perhaps I could suggest something?
Hey, if I can write a poem thats not crap, that's okay with me. I've never been very good at it lol... I'll have a weekend where I write a couple things, but mostly I work on short stories I'm trying to get published...
Posting writing and creating a steady stream (which you seem to have been doing) is really great, but you don't get that kind of in depth analysis and criticism here that you really need to redraft and really workshop a piece of writing. Hopefully you have someone you could workshop with in the real world?
As for stagnancy, I find that what I'm reading really changes what and how I'm writing. What/Who have you been reading? What/Who do you really enjoy reading? Perhaps I could suggest something?
Yeah, my issue has always been a lack of editing. Even my most edited pieces only ever wind up going through five, six revisions (I try to revise a couple pieces every week, especially when I'm having trouble writing). Should probably start taking advantage of my editor/peer relationship with Guilan (I've helped him out with two or three of his poems before).
I never really like editing my poems, aside for spelling errors and such. My poems are usually an instance in time and I like to preserve exactly what I was thinking.
Rainstorm and Sleep both did it for me this week. I identify strongly with them and the way the speaker approaches life.
I'm pretty sure Sam's Rainstorm was a poem speaking about golden leaves, before rain.
Oh, yes. The poem changed a lot. It had a lot of slant rhymes in it and was, on the whole, terribly amateur. I think I edited it three or four times, though after the second I already had the ending.
I wanted to write about autumn [the poem started off called 'fall'] but this worked a lot better, I thought. For one, it's muuuuch more subtle.
All my poems have started to dovetail, but they do so in such different ways, don't you think?
I don't think this one is necessarily finished. ... but it's much nicer than it was when it started. That's all I can ask.
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Also: AHHH I TYPOED! Mature = nature [though that's a kind of clever typo, isn't it. hehe.]
Ilvaldi, don't leave.
Griselbrand: cute. Not my thing, though.
Guilan: censor evasion! Oh, no. I liked a few of the clever rhymes here.
Rubin: Interesting.
Zelderex: Same, though paint-ing? oh, come on. [in lesser news, it's =/ its]
Uncle Istvan, you have the singular prize of making me look up a word [regolith]. It's a very nice word.
Ilvaldi and ... um ... someone else this week. That poem just caught me. Breaking it down:
-Mane seems ... a little unfinished to me. As does Sleep [not unfinished writing-wise, just in medias res abandoned, and I love that narrative ending, you know?].
I think out of the poems I liked enough to pass on [four] Soft Map wins. I /think/ I know what it's about
two people in the cold, one freezing to death, the other digging up to life through the dead person for some reason
and if that's right, well ... I don't know. It's nice in its agony. Not perfect, but nothing is.
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my mouth is full of winsome lies -
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
two people in the cold, one freezing to death, the other digging up to life through the dead person for some reason
Haha not what I was trying to write, but okay. No, it was just about two people out at a watering hole on the edge of a larger town. The narrator is a female who feels guilty because she doesn't really love the other person. Ambiguity is fun though
And yeah when I write a poem, I actually just string together a bunch of words I like...
Here are the Poetry submissions for this week:
Griselbrand is Coming, by Guitarfreak 1015
Cold Insights, by Guilan
Rainstorm, by Sam111111
Sleep, by Rubin
The Governor's Warfield Parkway, by Ivaldi
Mane, by Zelderex
Soft Map, by UncleIstvan
Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
Join the Poetry Running Contest!
Griselbrand is Coming: I lol'd.
Cold Insights: Stream of consciousness not my favorite, and seemed a little contrived. I like a very tight poem, where every word matters, and this seemed to have a little too much fluff for my liking.
Rainstorm: Poem about the rain, been done, but the repetition was very nice, and I liked the somewhat prosaic language and structure.
Sleep: I really liked it until you hit "down the rabbit hole", then it seemed like a string of cliched sentences and phrases strung together.
The Governor's Warfield Parkway: Very innocent language. The specificity of place gave a real individuality to the piece and the little clumps of imagery were quite pretty.
Mane: I liked the ending, the irony of being consumed by a goal and winning but actually losing. I also liked some of the individual lines, but the metaphor of the lion and the gazelle did not really excite me. I wrote a poem in high school about a forest fire, and it was really really awful, so now reading anything about forest fires makes me cringe lol.
Good to have you back with the PRC! Same goes to Ivaldi. We had a good week, so I figured I'd to a full Critique.
Griselbrand is Coming: ...oh...kay?
Cold Insights: I liked it less and less the longer it went. It lacked focus.
Rainstorm: Thoroughly enjoyed it. Excellently written, loved the deep analysis of the tiniest little things, and the sidelong social commentary.
Sleep: Just didn't find much to like in here. I was all about it during the first two stanzas, assuming it'd be about sloth and lost potential and all those good things, then it just sorta didn't find a subject matter and lost focus.
The Governor's Warfield Parkway: Well ****. I know a winning Poem when I see one.
Soft Map: Just generally unexciting. It's the Off-White Paint of poems: good, nothing wrong with it, just not special.
As for my piece, feel like I'm in a rut as far as my writing goes- it doesn't help that I rotate between lousy, and win/near-win. I need to work on refining my writing, putting more focus on what works in the poem and removing what doesn't work.
Join the Poetry Running Contest!
Hey, if I can write a poem thats not crap, that's okay with me. I've never been very good at it lol... I'll have a weekend where I write a couple things, but mostly I work on short stories I'm trying to get published...
Posting writing and creating a steady stream (which you seem to have been doing) is really great, but you don't get that kind of in depth analysis and criticism here that you really need to redraft and really workshop a piece of writing. Hopefully you have someone you could workshop with in the real world?
As for stagnancy, I find that what I'm reading really changes what and how I'm writing. What/Who have you been reading? What/Who do you really enjoy reading? Perhaps I could suggest something?
I also like pokemon. I like to observe and collect things. What do you think that I am? Yes, an Asperger.
jk.
special thanks to sentimentgx4 for the sig
Pourquoi?
I'm glad you like it. And such an elogio you gave me.
as for myself, this round I picked the most interesting pome I've read since yesterday.
And also, because of some pomes I picked for this autumn vanished before I could notice.
I'm pretty sure Sam's Rainstorm was a pome speaking about golden leaves, before rain.
And Ilvaldi's pome also has changed, I don't know why.
I chose Mane, because Lions roar and me like magnificence. Can't add more stressful words to it, frankly.
special thanks to sentimentgx4 for the sig
Pourquoi?
I'm glad you like it. And such an elogio you gave me.
Yeah, my issue has always been a lack of editing. Even my most edited pieces only ever wind up going through five, six revisions (I try to revise a couple pieces every week, especially when I'm having trouble writing). Should probably start taking advantage of my editor/peer relationship with Guilan (I've helped him out with two or three of his poems before).
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Rainstorm and Sleep both did it for me this week. I identify strongly with them and the way the speaker approaches life.
Oh, yes. The poem changed a lot. It had a lot of slant rhymes in it and was, on the whole, terribly amateur. I think I edited it three or four times, though after the second I already had the ending.
I wanted to write about autumn [the poem started off called 'fall'] but this worked a lot better, I thought. For one, it's muuuuch more subtle.
All my poems have started to dovetail, but they do so in such different ways, don't you think?
I don't think this one is necessarily finished. ... but it's much nicer than it was when it started. That's all I can ask.
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Also: AHHH I TYPOED! Mature = nature [though that's a kind of clever typo, isn't it. hehe.]
Ilvaldi, don't leave.
Griselbrand: cute. Not my thing, though.
Guilan: censor evasion! Oh, no. I liked a few of the clever rhymes here.
Rubin: Interesting.
Zelderex: Same, though paint-ing? oh, come on. [in lesser news, it's =/ its]
Uncle Istvan, you have the singular prize of making me look up a word [regolith]. It's a very nice word.
Ilvaldi and ... um ... someone else this week. That poem just caught me. Breaking it down:
-Mane seems ... a little unfinished to me. As does Sleep [not unfinished writing-wise, just in medias res abandoned, and I love that narrative ending, you know?].
I think out of the poems I liked enough to pass on [four] Soft Map wins. I /think/ I know what it's about
two people in the cold, one freezing to death, the other digging up to life through the dead person for some reason
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
Haha not what I was trying to write, but okay. No, it was just about two people out at a watering hole on the edge of a larger town. The narrator is a female who feels guilty because she doesn't really love the other person. Ambiguity is fun though
And yeah when I write a poem, I actually just string together a bunch of words I like...
First non-tie in a while.
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