Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
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- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
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Happy voting!
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Damnit. My plan was to pop the cherry, but I literally cannot pick one, even two submissions that stand out more than the others. I'm pretty much in love with all five this week.
There is something wrong with the poll. People aren't supposed to vote for more than two entries.
Thank you for pointing it out, Guilan. I would have noticed later, and since he voted for all 5 anyway, there's no harm done. I won't be counting Griselbrand's vote(s) for this Poll, and will send him a PM asking him not to do so in the future.
I wouldn't necessarily say it crashed and burned, I'd say its the way you structured your poem visually. The visual structure of the poem gives the reader a tempo, and naturally the space/paragraphing breaks between each line will allow the poem to flow more visually, and consequently verbally as well. Instead of doing odd strung out lines with a small break here and there, make the entire poem small lines while utilizing enjambment in order to lead the reader's eyes into the next line.
Example:
Untitled by iCwalzy
I have to find my escape from
this game of reasoning.
Venom drips.
It's in my head now. Am I
poisoned? Will I be that
way? I can't let it be in my
blood... Temporary.
Those thoughts flee, I'm
me. Safe again, winding down.
Chills rush over me, I
wonder why I even
began writing.
Forget. Forgive.
Forget? Impossible. I'm angry
again. Forgive? I can do
that. Calm now. Resent not,
move forward. I see regret,
it's not mine though. I
don't own any of that.
I never will.
I am better.
Colors fly, flashes boom.
Confusion leaves, and I can
see the finish line.
The finish line is
you.
The form in itself, visually, would resemble the venom dripping, the lines being split and enjambed draw the reader's eye to the next line, while the last two lines present a punch now that it is split and ends with 'you' as a finishing word, as if it were a 'finish line' (which is now also a play on words with the finishing line being 'you' as the 'finish line'). The message now flows much more naturally, but not necissarily rythmically, but visually. Remember that free verse does not need to use consistent meter patterns or rhyme. In your case, the message isn't sent strictly by the words, but by the visual structure of the poem as well.
And I disagree with Guilan about free verse needing rhythm, it just needs a message. The beauty of free verse is in that it is free of rhythm and rhyme, it could still use it, but free verse is free verse because it isn't restricted by rythmic or rhyming patterns.
I wouldn't necessarily say it crashed and burned, I'd say its the way you structured your poem visually. The visual structure of the poem gives the reader a tempo, and naturally the space/paragraphing breaks between each line will allow the poem to flow more visually, and consequently verbally as well. Instead of doing odd strung out lines with a small break here and there, make the entire poem small lines while utilizing enjambment in order to lead the reader's eyes into the next line.
The form in itself, visually, would resemble the venom dripping, the lines being split and enjambed draw the reader's eye to the next line, while the last two lines present a punch now that it is split and ends with 'you' as a finishing word, as if it were a 'finish line' (which is now also a play on words with the finishing line being 'you' as the 'finish line'). The message now flows much more naturally, but not necissarily rythmically, but visually. Remember that free verse does not need to use consistent meter patterns or rhyme. In your case, the message isn't sent strictly by the words, but by the visual structure of the poem as well.
And I disagree with Guilan about free verse needing rhythm, it just needs a message. The beauty of free verse is in that it is free of rhythm and rhyme, it could still use it, but free verse is free verse because it isn't restricted by rythmic or rhyming patterns.
Thanks a bunch for the constructive criticism and pointers!
I didn't feel much welcome in the words "Maybe because you overdid it.":P
Although others might not see what rhythm or basis I had, I write for myself as a form of stress relief so I know which pace and rhythm to read at.
I've never been good at breaking up poems and spacing them correctly, so I do appreciate the tips.
Congratulations to Blippytheslug and Chilligyro, the winners of PRC 183!
On another note, I'm always happy to see discussion. This sort of collaboration is what the PRC is all about, and I was pleased to see we got a healthy talk going this week.
Here are the Poetry submissions for this week:
Woven Paradigms by Guilan
Untitled by iCwalzy
Nailed to Time by Chiligyro
**** I Miss Being a DJ by Blippytheslug
Uncertainty by Preve
Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
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The epic way my mind read this part confirmed my vote.
"My life is hollow
But still goes on
Worthy of nothing
Everything – gone"
special thanks to sentimentgx4 for the sig
Pourquoi?
Thank you for pointing it out, Guilan. I would have noticed later, and since he voted for all 5 anyway, there's no harm done. I won't be counting Griselbrand's vote(s) for this Poll, and will send him a PM asking him not to do so in the future.
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I do freeverse all the time, but I have the rhythm and the structure in my mind.
In my poems there's little fixed rhyme structure, but they have rhythm, which is all it needs to be poetry.
special thanks to sentimentgx4 for the sig
Pourquoi?
I wouldn't necessarily say it crashed and burned, I'd say its the way you structured your poem visually. The visual structure of the poem gives the reader a tempo, and naturally the space/paragraphing breaks between each line will allow the poem to flow more visually, and consequently verbally as well. Instead of doing odd strung out lines with a small break here and there, make the entire poem small lines while utilizing enjambment in order to lead the reader's eyes into the next line.
Example:
The form in itself, visually, would resemble the venom dripping, the lines being split and enjambed draw the reader's eye to the next line, while the last two lines present a punch now that it is split and ends with 'you' as a finishing word, as if it were a 'finish line' (which is now also a play on words with the finishing line being 'you' as the 'finish line'). The message now flows much more naturally, but not necissarily rythmically, but visually. Remember that free verse does not need to use consistent meter patterns or rhyme. In your case, the message isn't sent strictly by the words, but by the visual structure of the poem as well.
And I disagree with Guilan about free verse needing rhythm, it just needs a message. The beauty of free verse is in that it is free of rhythm and rhyme, it could still use it, but free verse is free verse because it isn't restricted by rythmic or rhyming patterns.
Thanks a bunch for the constructive criticism and pointers!
I didn't feel much welcome in the words "Maybe because you overdid it.":P
Although others might not see what rhythm or basis I had, I write for myself as a form of stress relief so I know which pace and rhythm to read at.
I've never been good at breaking up poems and spacing them correctly, so I do appreciate the tips.
Thanks again.
On another note, I'm always happy to see discussion. This sort of collaboration is what the PRC is all about, and I was pleased to see we got a healthy talk going this week.
Join the Poetry Running Contest!