Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
Blippy, your word choice is orgasmically bizarre. Saccharine? Do you know the last time I heard that word?
****ing never. I love you.
Saccharine, you say?
...
Anyways. I don't like this week because there are too many poems. Can I vote for four people? Decisions are harddddd. I only have one note, because it's just grammar.
Zelderex:
Dreaming of it is kiss but knowing the lie
behind it is bliss
Is this really what you meant to say?
I voted for Guilan and Blippy: Zelderex, you were right there.
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my mouth is full of winsome lies -
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
Anyways. I don't like this week because there are too many poems. Can I vote for four people? Decisions are harddddd. I only have one note, because it's just grammar.
Zelderex:
Is this really what you meant to say?
I voted for Guilan and Blippy: Zelderex, you were right there.
I came thiiiiis close to making the same comment about your title.
Thanks for pointing out the apostrophe error. It slips through every once in a while.
Regarding submissions:
I sorta liked Preve's, couldn't really find somewhere to ground myself. Blippy was absolutely on point this week, with his normal weirdness and Lyricism really highlighting the intensity ('Zombie God Theology' was such a brilliant phrasing for the cadence). Guilan was good.
Pancake Puffs: Lemme quote somebody talking about something I submitted "A point made clearly, if not artfully rendered." It's always hit and miss with stuff like that, though I generally find brevity a virtue in that area. You could have easily trimmed the last two stanzas, and stanzas 3-6, and gotten the same point across, but with the focus being on imagery and emotion, not necessarily thought and words. Just my input.
Pancake Puffs: Lemme quote somebody talking about something I submitted "A point made clearly, if not artfully rendered." It's always hit and miss with stuff like that, though I generally find brevity a virtue in that area. You could have easily trimmed the last two stanzas, and stanzas 3-6, and gotten the same point across, but with the focus being on imagery and emotion, not necessarily thought and words. Just my input.
So less is more, correct? If so, I understand what you're saying. The whole idea of the response was more of a flashy and upstaging approach, shooting down another set of rhymes with my own. This was project I attempted after hearing that song and was a spoken word poem for a "Slam poetry reading" that is hard to gauge emotionally without hearing it in person. I wish I could find the video of me presenting it, but my efforts have been fruitless. Nonetheless, the criticism is very much appreciated.
As for this week, Blippy's poem really got me right there in the heart. It spoke so loud and bluntly, both relative to the holiday times and contemporary topics of the views of religion, and everything just worked so well with what I've been experiencing lately. Putting the hypocrisy of it all on the spot, beautifully as well.
Enjoyed Zelderex's poem a lot this week. A longer, slower poem that still flowed was nice.
Enjoyed Blippy's, even though Jesus is my homeboy.
Puffs messed with Eminem, so we're gonna fight. (haha, jk.. kinda.) ;D
Blarg. Misclicked and didn't get my second vote in, which was for "Saccharine". Oh, Zeldy! Can you fix that for me, lover boy? I'll put on that schoolgirl outfit that you like so much...
I came thiiiiis close to making the same comment about your title.
I only wrote it because of that actually.
Regarding submissions:
I sorta liked Preve's, couldn't really find somewhere to ground myself.
That was the point of the piece, I guess, and was probably why it didn't really work. It's about being saccharine - about being too cloying and sweet without any substance, and I wanted to echo the meaning of the word. But when I echoed the meaning of the word, it made the poem not 'matter' in a sense.
Alas. It's experimentation.
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my mouth is full of winsome lies -
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
That was the point of the piece, I guess, and was probably why it didn't really work. It's about being saccharine - about being too cloying and sweet without any substance, and I wanted to echo the meaning of the word. But when I echoed the meaning of the word, it made the poem not 'matter' in a sense.
Alas. It's experimentation.
It was cool, for sure. I feel like some sort of strong rhythm, or repetition would've helped keep focus a little more, but that's just my style. I'm not really in any position to give you tips, Mr. Lifetime achievement in PRC.
It was cool, for sure. I feel like some sort of strong rhythm, or repetition would've helped keep focus a little more, but that's just my style. I'm not really in any position to give you tips, Mr. Lifetime achievement in PRC.
Well, what I'm saying is that I wanted to make the poem itself echo the word - that is, I wanted it to be fleeting and meaningless, yet beautiful, maybe /too/ beautiful, 'overly or sickeningly sweet'. I don't think it was beautiful enough to achieve the goal really. But putting strong rhythm or repetition would've acted counter to the initial idea, heh.
[Also. I wouldn't really put any stock into lifetime PRC achievementness. >.>]
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my mouth is full of winsome lies -
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
Here are the Poetry submissions for this week:
Saccharine by Preve
Road by Chiligyro
Runescape by iCwalzy
Merry Christmas by Blippytheslug
Beyond the Invisible Line by Guilan
Wayward (Fool's Gold Standard) by Zelderex
In Response to Eminem's MOSH by Pancake Puffs
Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
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Saccharine, you say?
...
Anyways. I don't like this week because there are too many poems. Can I vote for four people? Decisions are harddddd. I only have one note, because it's just grammar.
Zelderex:
Is this really what you meant to say?
I voted for Guilan and Blippy: Zelderex, you were right there.
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
I came thiiiiis close to making the same comment about your title.
Thanks for pointing out the apostrophe error. It slips through every once in a while.
Regarding submissions:
I sorta liked Preve's, couldn't really find somewhere to ground myself. Blippy was absolutely on point this week, with his normal weirdness and Lyricism really highlighting the intensity ('Zombie God Theology' was such a brilliant phrasing for the cadence). Guilan was good.
Pancake Puffs: Lemme quote somebody talking about something I submitted "A point made clearly, if not artfully rendered." It's always hit and miss with stuff like that, though I generally find brevity a virtue in that area. You could have easily trimmed the last two stanzas, and stanzas 3-6, and gotten the same point across, but with the focus being on imagery and emotion, not necessarily thought and words. Just my input.
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So less is more, correct? If so, I understand what you're saying. The whole idea of the response was more of a flashy and upstaging approach, shooting down another set of rhymes with my own. This was project I attempted after hearing that song and was a spoken word poem for a "Slam poetry reading" that is hard to gauge emotionally without hearing it in person. I wish I could find the video of me presenting it, but my efforts have been fruitless. Nonetheless, the criticism is very much appreciated.
As for this week, Blippy's poem really got me right there in the heart. It spoke so loud and bluntly, both relative to the holiday times and contemporary topics of the views of religion, and everything just worked so well with what I've been experiencing lately. Putting the hypocrisy of it all on the spot, beautifully as well.
Enjoyed Blippy's, even though Jesus is my homeboy.
Puffs messed with Eminem, so we're gonna fight. (haha, jk.. kinda.) ;D
Well when you put it that way...
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I only wrote it because of that actually.
That was the point of the piece, I guess, and was probably why it didn't really work. It's about being saccharine - about being too cloying and sweet without any substance, and I wanted to echo the meaning of the word. But when I echoed the meaning of the word, it made the poem not 'matter' in a sense.
Alas. It's experimentation.
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
It was cool, for sure. I feel like some sort of strong rhythm, or repetition would've helped keep focus a little more, but that's just my style. I'm not really in any position to give you tips, Mr. Lifetime achievement in PRC.
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Well, what I'm saying is that I wanted to make the poem itself echo the word - that is, I wanted it to be fleeting and meaningless, yet beautiful, maybe /too/ beautiful, 'overly or sickeningly sweet'. I don't think it was beautiful enough to achieve the goal really. But putting strong rhythm or repetition would've acted counter to the initial idea, heh.
[Also. I wouldn't really put any stock into lifetime PRC achievementness. >.>]
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
special thanks to sentimentgx4 for the sig
Pourquoi?
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