Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
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- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
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Voted for Cerberus, honorable mention to Lucknorris. Ilvaldi's poem wasn't quite as polished and delicately crafted as I'm used to, but the air of wonder is still there, and his ability to step into the place of someone stepping into another's place never fails to amaze me.
I voted for Zelderex this week because his poem gave me a Borborygmos Enraged feel with a hint of Dylan Thomas' Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night. Very expressive and ignited with a feeling I can currently relate to, and I feel like it was the poem that was on the spot for me this week.
I've also gotta say I'm a little disappointed in my own work this week. after re-reading it and in hindsight I've noticed revisions that could be made to my poem that would "show more" instead of telling of the experience I was trying to portray.
I don't know why no one else has voted for Preve and Lucknorris. There were some things I found wrong in their poems, but the craft is prominent there, better than what I've seen in previous competitions.
I'm usually not a fan of rhyme on this thread, mainly because most of it is end-stop. It's not to say that I don't like end-stopped rhymes, it's just that I find it pointless sometimes, i.e., I find it questionable why it is there when, considering the subject matter of the poem, slant rhyme, or maybe even internal rhyme would be better. Lucknorris' was actually a pretty good example of what I like about poems with an internal rhyming measure, regardless if this was an intentional thing or not. Albeit, for revision though, I would cut out some parts that I felt were unnecessary for the poem such as "eternal solitude." The tone and language of the poem already conveys a wonderful sense of solemnity which makes the statement of "solitude" entirely moot, even more so, you throw in the the word "eternal" and the matter becomes unbelievable. It's what I think we would colloquially say, "you're trying too hard."
"You're trying too hard" to the point where the reader finds the experience in regards to be unauthentic. Rather than conveying some sense of ponder, the poem instead is conveying some sense about ponder.
Also, you should check grammar and punctuation. The comma, for example, at the end of the first line of the last stanza, is not needed and disrupts the flow of the poem.
I don't know why no one else has voted for Preve and Lucknorris. There were some things I found wrong in their poems, but the craft is prominent there, better than what I've seen in previous competitions.
I'm usually not a fan of rhyme on this thread, mainly because most of it is end-stop. It's not to say that I don't like end-stopped rhymes, it's just that I find it pointless sometimes, i.e., I find it questionable why it is there when, considering the subject matter of the poem, slant rhyme, or maybe even internal rhyme would be better. Lucknorris' was actually a pretty good example of what I like about poems with an internal rhyming measure, regardless if this was an intentional thing or not. Albeit, for revision though, I would cut out some parts that I felt were unnecessary for the poem such as "eternal solitude." The tone and language of the poem already conveys a wonderful sense of solemnity which makes the statement of "solitude" entirely moot, even more so, you throw in the the word "eternal" and the matter becomes unbelievable. It's what I think we would colloquially say, "you're trying too hard."
"You're trying too hard" to the point where the reader finds the experience in regards to be unauthentic. Rather than conveying some sense of ponder, the poem instead is conveying some sense about ponder.
Also, you should grammar and punctuation. The comma, for example, at the end of the first line of the last stanza, is not needed and disrupts the flow of the poem.
Wow, thank you for the critique Ilvaldi.
I still consider myself a novice when it comes to poetry, I write here and there, but I still need a lot of practice to become better, as with any craft. I will continue to take constructive criticism (when I first posted some poems on this forum they all used a very bland forced-rhyme measure) and I think I've improved a lot since beginning to write.
I will definitely take your suggestions in to consideration. Thank you!
Ilvaldi, I feel like in general certain kinds of poems are voted for more frequently than certain other kinds of poems. e.g.: love poems. Happier poems. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but given my recent digressions it's going to make it a lot harder to receive votes for pretty much anything. [Lucknorris's poem isn't exactly the happiest thing in the world either.]
in regards to this week ... meh. Can I not vote for anything? *mehvote*
my mouth is full of winsome lies -
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
Ilvaldi, I feel like in general certain kinds of poems are voted for more frequently than certain other kinds of poems. e.g.: love poems. Happier poems. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but given my recent digressions it's going to make it a lot harder to receive votes for pretty much anything. [Lucknorris's poem isn't exactly the happiest thing in the world either.]
in regards to this week ... meh. Can I not vote for anything? *mehvote*
Yeah my poem was written during some dark times, and well, I create poems that correspond with my mood.
I wish I could write a solid love poem, but that's just not my style.
Ilvaldi, I feel like in general certain kinds of poems are voted for more frequently than certain other kinds of poems. e.g.: love poems. Happier poems. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but given my recent digressions it's going to make it a lot harder to receive votes for pretty much anything. [Lucknorris's poem isn't exactly the happiest thing in the world either.]
in regards to this week ... meh. Can I not vote for anything? *mehvote*
Yeah my poem was written during some dark times, and well, I create poems that correspond with my mood.
I wish I could write a solid love poem, but that's just not my style.
Love poems are fine on my book. But if I'm voting for a love poem, it better be something good or interesting. If I vote for a poem, I want to vote for a poem that induces me into an idea, rather than already being induced into an idea and then vote for a poem that matches that. Sure, some subjectivity comes into play, but this is why I let technique and execution weigh in a little bit more for me than my sympathy for the subject.
Love poems are fine on my book. But if I'm voting for a love poem, it better be something good or interesting. If I vote for a poem, I want to vote for a poem that induces me into an idea, rather than already being induced into an idea and then vote for a poem that matches that. Sure, some subjectivity comes into play, but this is why I let technique and execution weigh in a little bit more for me than my sympathy for the subject.
Don't get me wrong, I enjoy a good love poem. I actually find some love poem's very touching, I'm a fan of them for sure.
I just don't think I'll be writing them for a while, for obvious reasons.
Ilvaldi, I feel like in general certain kinds of poems are voted for more frequently than certain other kinds of poems. e.g.: love poems. Happier poems. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but given my recent digressions it's going to make it a lot harder to receive votes for pretty much anything. [Lucknorris's poem isn't exactly the happiest thing in the world either.]
in regards to this week ... meh. Can I not vote for anything? *mehvote*
Wow, I'm really impressed by the entries this week. I'm voting for Lucknorris and Zelderex, with Ilvaldi getting a third vote if I had one to give. As the nature freak that I am, the almost animistic sense of Lucknorris's poem meant that I instantly fell in love with it. The poems by Zelderex and Ivaldi both remind me of poets that I have read in the past, His/her/their name(s) escapes me at the moment, but they were both very enjoyable for the tangents they take you on. I connected with Zelderex's a bit more.
Here are the Poetry submissions for this week:
Poison by Preve
A Lonely Pine by Lucknorris
The Cold of a Winter's Night by Pancake_Puffs
Cerberus by Ilvaldi
Untitled by Zelderex
Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
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- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
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I've also gotta say I'm a little disappointed in my own work this week. after re-reading it and in hindsight I've noticed revisions that could be made to my poem that would "show more" instead of telling of the experience I was trying to portray.
I'm usually not a fan of rhyme on this thread, mainly because most of it is end-stop. It's not to say that I don't like end-stopped rhymes, it's just that I find it pointless sometimes, i.e., I find it questionable why it is there when, considering the subject matter of the poem, slant rhyme, or maybe even internal rhyme would be better. Lucknorris' was actually a pretty good example of what I like about poems with an internal rhyming measure, regardless if this was an intentional thing or not. Albeit, for revision though, I would cut out some parts that I felt were unnecessary for the poem such as "eternal solitude." The tone and language of the poem already conveys a wonderful sense of solemnity which makes the statement of "solitude" entirely moot, even more so, you throw in the the word "eternal" and the matter becomes unbelievable. It's what I think we would colloquially say, "you're trying too hard."
"You're trying too hard" to the point where the reader finds the experience in regards to be unauthentic. Rather than conveying some sense of ponder, the poem instead is conveying some sense about ponder.
Also, you should check grammar and punctuation. The comma, for example, at the end of the first line of the last stanza, is not needed and disrupts the flow of the poem.
Wow, thank you for the critique Ilvaldi.
I still consider myself a novice when it comes to poetry, I write here and there, but I still need a lot of practice to become better, as with any craft. I will continue to take constructive criticism (when I first posted some poems on this forum they all used a very bland forced-rhyme measure) and I think I've improved a lot since beginning to write.
I will definitely take your suggestions in to consideration. Thank you!
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in regards to this week ... meh. Can I not vote for anything? *mehvote*
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
Yeah my poem was written during some dark times, and well, I create poems that correspond with my mood.
I wish I could write a solid love poem, but that's just not my style.
My Mafia Stats - My Helpdesk
G Omnath, Locus of Mana U Arcum Dagsson BUG The Mimeoplasm GW Gaddock Teeg X Karn, Silver Golem
Love poems are fine on my book. But if I'm voting for a love poem, it better be something good or interesting. If I vote for a poem, I want to vote for a poem that induces me into an idea, rather than already being induced into an idea and then vote for a poem that matches that. Sure, some subjectivity comes into play, but this is why I let technique and execution weigh in a little bit more for me than my sympathy for the subject.
Don't get me wrong, I enjoy a good love poem. I actually find some love poem's very touching, I'm a fan of them for sure.
I just don't think I'll be writing them for a while, for obvious reasons.
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G Omnath, Locus of Mana U Arcum Dagsson BUG The Mimeoplasm GW Gaddock Teeg X Karn, Silver Golem
Wow, I'm really impressed by the entries this week. I'm voting for Lucknorris and Zelderex, with Ilvaldi getting a third vote if I had one to give. As the nature freak that I am, the almost animistic sense of Lucknorris's poem meant that I instantly fell in love with it. The poems by Zelderex and Ivaldi both remind me of poets that I have read in the past, His/her/their name(s) escapes me at the moment, but they were both very enjoyable for the tangents they take you on. I connected with Zelderex's a bit more.
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