Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
After some trial-by-error I took the old version of the PRC 195 thread you deleted, made a dummy thread with the correct poll, merged the threads, and edited Iso's poem into the OP. I hope you don't mind I really hope that if Curse does any software upgrades that they'd do something about polls so that it doesn't take a moderator that much time...
On another note, awesome that kpaca decided to return to Personal Writing
After some trial-by-error I took the old version of the PRC 195 thread you deleted, made a dummy thread with the correct poll, merged the threads, and edited Iso's poem into the OP. I hope you don't mind I really hope that if Curse does any software upgrades that they'd do something about polls so that it doesn't take a moderator that much time...
On another note, awesome that kpaca decided to return to Personal Writing
You are literally my favorite person ever I'll be sure to give a personal critique of every poem you ever submit from now until always and marry me.
Anyways, thrilled to see Kpaca return (try and go a month or two before your next suspension, ya hear?), and it's always good to see Iso, a seemingly permanent tangent in my life.
Critiques:
Trabant: Lacked focus, clarity and detail. Good word choice, and I had no trouble following it through but it all felt like the set up. I'm left wondering what the wall is- is it a metaphor for social isolation, and you're (the speaker, anyway) worried that going out into public will physically undo you? Have you been hiding from some present threat? Is it a veiled reference to the fall of the Berlin Wall? Some sort of clarity, even in throwaway details would really help bring out the strength here. I liked the structure though, simple, almost worksmanlike, but leaning on the strength of the writing.
iCwalzy: fun, I liked it.
Kpaca: a return to form for the Gangster Poet. I didn't know it was actually possible for you to simplify your style any more, but you found a way to boil it down to the bare essentials.
Blippy: Well said.
Iso: Not entirely sure what to make of it. I'm inferring a thinly veiled metaphor for misused religion, or bigotry or some such. Not quite feeling the word choice though.
I thought the other one was going to be 7 days for some reason! Oh well.
I'm working on a poem something but it's more of a game and probably doesn't fit into this, so I may be absent from the contest a few weeks. Will try to vote regardless.
*edit*
I voted for the two best poems because they're the two best poems. /analysis
my mouth is full of winsome lies -
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
Trabant: Lacked focus, clarity and detail. Good word choice, and I had no trouble following it through but it all felt like the set up. I'm left wondering what the wall is- is it a metaphor for social isolation, and you're (the speaker, anyway) worried that going out into public will physically undo you? Have you been hiding from some present threat? Is it a veiled reference to the fall of the Berlin Wall? Some sort of clarity, even in throwaway details would really help bring out the strength here. I liked the structure though, simple, almost worksmanlike, but leaning on the strength of the writing.
It's about love silly! It's about someone who has built up emotional barriers, from being constantly hurt, but then they met someone who finally made them want to open up again. So even though they have dropped their guard, they can still feel the effects of the emotional isolation. they are still terrified of being hurt again and they know that regaurdless of wether it works out, it will be the last time they can stand being crushed... Being broken... Anyway...
I voted for Iso because I liked the flow... And I voted for Kpaca because I thought it was interesting.
You do! I somehow forgot to add Round 184 to your list of wins. I'll be sending a new trophy request probably monday, to catch up on Ilvaldi's pile of new ones, and one or two other trophies, including yours. Congrats on grinding out your first Trophy so quickly, by the way. I didn't get my first for twenty odd weeks after my first win, plus an extra four or five between my first submission and my first win. An excellent start to a hopefully long "career" with the PRC. Maybe someday you'll ascend to Preve's level of no-lifing
Here are the Poetry submissions for this week:
The Stand by Trabant777
Mirros by iCwalzy
Chicken Stick by kpaca
Your ***** Smells Like Chicken by Blippytheslug
I, Humanity by Iso
Vote for the poem(s) you feel is the best (up to two). Remember to adhere to the "Honor Code" when voting.
While it is understood there is no absolute means to monitor the intent of a vote, we ask each PRC participant to exercise integrity when voting out of respect for the contest:
- Please give each poetry submission an equal opportunity in attaining your vote.
- Please read, or at least skim, all the entries before voting.
- Please do not vote for your friends just because they're your friends.
The Poetry Running Contest puts good faith in its participants to act in an honorable manner.
Contestants, remember, you are required required to vote (and you can't vote for yourself)!
Happy voting!
*Interested new participants should submit their poems here.
Join the Poetry Running Contest!
On another note, awesome that kpaca decided to return to Personal Writing
You are literally my favorite person ever I'll be sure to give a personal critique of every poem you ever submit from now until always and marry me.
Anyways, thrilled to see Kpaca return (try and go a month or two before your next suspension, ya hear?), and it's always good to see Iso, a seemingly permanent tangent in my life.
Critiques:
Trabant: Lacked focus, clarity and detail. Good word choice, and I had no trouble following it through but it all felt like the set up. I'm left wondering what the wall is- is it a metaphor for social isolation, and you're (the speaker, anyway) worried that going out into public will physically undo you? Have you been hiding from some present threat? Is it a veiled reference to the fall of the Berlin Wall? Some sort of clarity, even in throwaway details would really help bring out the strength here. I liked the structure though, simple, almost worksmanlike, but leaning on the strength of the writing.
iCwalzy: fun, I liked it.
Kpaca: a return to form for the Gangster Poet. I didn't know it was actually possible for you to simplify your style any more, but you found a way to boil it down to the bare essentials.
Blippy: Well said.
Iso: Not entirely sure what to make of it. I'm inferring a thinly veiled metaphor for misused religion, or bigotry or some such. Not quite feeling the word choice though.
As always, take my words with a grain of salt.
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I'm working on a poem something but it's more of a game and probably doesn't fit into this, so I may be absent from the contest a few weeks. Will try to vote regardless.
*edit*
I voted for the two best poems because they're the two best poems. /analysis
and eyes are full of death besides
but luckily the soul is wise -
it sees beyond my blindness and
forced failure makes a better guise,
so as i come again alive,
it feels like life's a decent plan
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WPL Epic WorldIt's about love silly! It's about someone who has built up emotional barriers, from being constantly hurt, but then they met someone who finally made them want to open up again. So even though they have dropped their guard, they can still feel the effects of the emotional isolation. they are still terrified of being hurt again and they know that regaurdless of wether it works out, it will be the last time they can stand being crushed... Being broken... Anyway...
I voted for Iso because I liked the flow... And I voted for Kpaca because I thought it was interesting.
Go ahead and run, you'll only die tired.
Those who might never meet are pooled together
That said my vanity made me vote for blippy.
Stay classy.
(And I feel like this miiiiight be a good occasion to put the second vote to work. Just a thought).
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I dunno i remember before I took some time off I only ever used one vote, so I didnt want anyone to think I'd changed completely
Well it's been over 24 hours and you haven't been suspended yet, so I'm already assuming you've been replaced by a robot.
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Do I get trophy?!
Or do ties not count..?
Haha.
You do! I somehow forgot to add Round 184 to your list of wins. I'll be sending a new trophy request probably monday, to catch up on Ilvaldi's pile of new ones, and one or two other trophies, including yours. Congrats on grinding out your first Trophy so quickly, by the way. I didn't get my first for twenty odd weeks after my first win, plus an extra four or five between my first submission and my first win. An excellent start to a hopefully long "career" with the PRC. Maybe someday you'll ascend to Preve's level of no-lifing
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Leave your ankles untouched.
Those are mine.
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